The Common Application Transfer Application: Take a Stand.

If you’re seeking to transfer to a different college or university, chances are you’re staring at the Common App Transfer Application, and it’s staring right back. But before you start in on an impassioned tirade about how much you despise your current school, take a deep breath and a read: We want you to get into your school of choice, not show them what great hate mail you’re capable of writing.

First of all, try to stifle the impulse to describe all the things you disliked about your last academic experience. If the urge is overwhelming, make a list of every little thing that bothers you, and then reverse each one to identify the positive qualities you hope to find in your next academic experience. From there, you can begin to develop a strong sense of the elements most important to you in transferring. This positive intention should lead the tenor and content of your essay and your transfer process.

The next necessary step is to conduct some in-depth stealth ninja research on the school of your heart’s desire. You’ll need to suss out all the special ways that this school fits your new life vision. Do they have an unparalleled music library, a dynamic undergrad film community, or the biochem research resources of a major institution? Whatever it is that you are seeking, make sure that it’s both clearly articulated and fully realized in the school to which you are applying. The more specific you can get at this juncture, the better.

Bottom line? It’s time to take a stand for what you really want out of your educational experience. Being able to clearly articulate these desires will reveal what a valuable community member you are, and what qualities you will bring to your new school’s campus. A rant about your current institution’s boring professors or dishwater dull cultural life will only reflect poorly upon you. So it’s worth your time to find out what makes the new campus where you hope to be next fall exceptional, and how those qualities distinctly relate to your own life.

Most importantly, you do need to commit to an identity and a set of goals that can be clearly situated within the context of the school to which you are applying. As a transfer applicant, you need to lay your best game on the line. If you want serious change in your life, you need to get serious about how that change will look, and in what kind of academic environment it’s most likely to occur. In the end, this kind of clarity will not only behoove your transfer application essay, but it will also help you build the kind of life you desire in the long run.

Best,

Lily

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Early Action Admissions Policy Back at Harvard and Yale

Hi everyone!

Check out the article below–Harvard (and also Yale) have decided to reinstate their early action admissions policies for Fall 2011. For the original article, visit here.

Cheers,

Joe

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In a reversal of a bold policy that College administrators once touted as a boon for lower-income students, Harvard and Princeton University both announced yesterday that they will resume the early admissions program for students applying this fall.

Concerned that such programs disadvantaged applicants from underprivileged backgrounds, Harvard—followed by the University of Virginia and Princeton—eliminated early admissions starting for the Class of 2012.

When Harvard announced in 2006 that it would suspend its early admissions program, the University sent shock waves through higher education, and the move was seen as a step forward for increasing access to education.

But in recent months, Harvard administrators have come to reconsider the policy amid concerns that the College may be missing some of the country’s most talented applicants.

“We looked carefully at trends in Harvard admissions these past years and saw that many highly talented students, including some of the best-prepared low-income and underrepresented minority students, were choosing programs with an early-action option, and therefore were missing out on the opportunity to consider Harvard,” Dean of the Faculty of Arts and Sciences Michael D. Smith said in a statement.

Beginning with students applying for the classes of 2016, Harvard and Princeton will both offer a single-choice early action application option. While this practice does not require admitted students to attend, it does prohibit students from applying to other schools’ early action or early decision programs.

But experts said that yesterday’s decision—an abrupt departure from the policy of the past four years—will dramatically alter the college admissions landscape for students seeking spots at highly selective universities.

Experts also question what has changed over the past four years to justify the policy’s return. Early admissions programs have in the past been considered beneficial for traditionally advantaged groups in the college admissions process—such as athletes, legacies, and the children of donors—but it remains unclear whether the return of early admissions will have negative repercussions for lower-income students.

EARLY RETURNS

Even as he was singing the praises of a single admissions cycle five years ago, Dean of Admissions and Financial Aid William R. Fitzsimmons ’67 said that the College might reevaluate its decision within a few years.

“If after several years with a single admissions deadline, we find ourselves needing to reinstate early admission to preserve the quality of our student body, we will return to early action,” he said in the 2006 statement which initially heralded the end of early action.

Describing the elimination as “an experiment” earlier this month, Fitzsimmons reiterated the fact that the decision was always open to review.

Fitzsimmons said that Harvard began seriously considering reinstating early action this past summer. After months of review, the Office of Admissions decided that the upswing in students applying to early programs across the country, as well as students’ desire to gain entry to Harvard earlier in the year, showed a need to resume early admissions at the College.

“We started to hear that more and more people were applying early across the country,” Fitzsimmons said. “Given the uncertainty that an economic downturn entails—people look for the certainty that early admission would provide.” He added that students are especially keen to secure speedy admission to a school with generous financial aid like Harvard.

Fitzsimmons pointed to rising numbers of early applications nationwide as evidence that early action programs have now become available to a larger pool of students than in 2006, when the College did away with the program.

University President Drew G. Faust said in a statement yesterday that the return of early action is now “consistent with our bedrock commitment to access, affordability, and excellence.”

Princeton President Shirley M. Tilghman also said in a statement that she believes that renewing early admissions will allow her school to better recruit students from underrepresented groups.

“By reinstating an early program, we hope we can achieve two goals: provide opportunities for early application for students who know that Princeton is their first choice, while at the same time sustaining and even enhancing the progress we have made in recent years in diversifying our applicant pool,” she said.

Fitzsimmons noted that applicants will gain no additional favor for choosing to apply in the early round rather than the regular cycle.

NO WORM FOR THE EARLY BIRD

When Harvard announced the elimination of early action in 2006, University officials hailed the move as a progressive step that would both help Harvard recruit students from underrepresented groups and ease the stress of the admissions process for students of all backgrounds.

Fitzsimmons told The Crimson in 2006 that the removal of early admission was “certainly a win for students in the bottom quarter and bottom half of the income distribution.”

At the time, the University argued that low-income students were hindered from participating in early admissions programs since they needed to apply to many schools in order to compare financial aid offers from multiple institutions.

In addition, Harvard administrators said that wealthier students had greater access to the resources needed to put together a successful college application by the Nov. 1 early action deadline.

“Early admission programs tend to advantage the advantaged,” then-Interim University President Derek C. Bok said in a statement. “Students from more sophisticated backgrounds and affluent high schools often apply early to increase their chances of admission, while minority students and students from rural areas, other countries, and high schools with fewer resources miss out.”

At the time of the announcement, Harvard administrators said that they hoped that many top universities would follow in Harvard’s footsteps, but only Virginia and Princeton did away with their early decision programs.

Some experts said that while the prestige of schools like Harvard and Princeton allowed them to eliminate early admission, other schools could not do so without significantly damaging the quality of their applicant pools.

“Other schools can’t afford to do away with early,” Amy Sack, president of admissions consulting company Admissions: Accomplished, said in an interview with The Crimson yesterday. “An early plan is very important to some schools, though it’s not maybe to schools like Harvard, Yale, Princeton, or Stanford,” which high-caliber high school seniors will apply to regardless of their application deadlines.

Despite the fact that only two schools mimicked Harvard’s policy during the past five years, independent Conn. college counselor Gay S. Pepper said she believes that Harvard changed the admissions climate for the better by temporarily eschewing early admissions.

“It sent a real shock wave. A lot of colleges realized that early decision wasn’t benefiting the students. Many colleges started [non-binding] early action programs instead,” Pepper said. “It was a very daring move.”

LEVELING THE PLAYING FIELD?

According to admissions experts, the reinstatement of early admissions programs at both Harvard and Princeton will fundamentally alter the dynamics of college admissions.

“This is a seismic shift,” said Michael Goran, director and educational consultant at IvySelect, a college counseling firm in California. “I really do believe that it creates a new dynamic.”

The four institutions that many consider the nation’s preeminent universities—Harvard, Yale, Princeton, and Stanford—now all offer non-binding single-choice early action programs. According to college counselors, students hoping to attend one of these schools are now likely to apply early to their first choice and attend if admitted, rather than apply to more schools and make up their minds in May.

“I think it will be the most earth-shattering for Yale,” said Sack, saying that in the past five years, students often applied early to Yale even if Harvard or Princeton was their first choice. Next year, Sack hypothesized, Yale’s early applications will decrease as those students migrate to Harvard and Princeton.

Experts said that Harvard stands to directly benefit from the new policy and will likely see a higher yield in the future.

“You’re not committed to the school, but at the end of the day, chances are you have already psychologically committed by applying early action in the first place,” Goran said, arguing that Harvard can now draw top students through its early action program.

Others were skeptical of the College’s claim that the reinstated early program will be equally accessible to students from diverse backgrounds. Cigus Vanni, a guidance counselor at Cherry Hill High School in New Jersey, said that early admission has traditionally been used to guarantee admission to athletes, legacies, and the children of donors as quickly as possible. Predicting that this trend will start again with the rebirth of Harvard’s early action program, Vanni said that having these candidates in the pool may boost the early admission rate, causing acceptance during the early cycle to appear deceptively easy.

Current applicants to the College interviewed by The Crimson yesterday reported that they would have applied early to Harvard had the option been available.

—Gautam S. Kumar contributed reporting to this story.

—Staff writer Justin C. Worland can be reached at jworland@college.harvard.edu.

—Staff writer Julie M. Zauzmer can be reached at jzauzmer@college.harvard.edu.

Making Science Sexy (To an Admissions Officer, that is…)

Are you a scientist through and through? Entrenched in the digits and details of research and data analysis? While your passion for scientific research might be self-evident to you, in order to effectively communicate this enthusiasm in your grad school statement of purpose, it’s imperative to find effective ways of humanizing your interests.

We often read essays from doctoral candidates in the hard sciences that read like articles for a scientific journal, replete with stats, variable, equations, and symbols. Remember that you are applying for an academic program, not a research position. The Admissions Committee will be able to see your publication and research history in your resume and supporting documents; use the Statement of Purpose and Personal History essays to elaborate on why this work is pivotal to you and the larger scientific (and human) communities. Think less about numbers and more about relatable details that make your work vital.

If you intend to study Human and Mammalian Genetics, challenge yourself to begin your essay by elaborating on the more human elements of your interest. What first compelled you–including personal or intellectual catalysts–to study this arena? (Careful never to claim your interests were pre-zygotic.) How do your future goals in the field relate to your unique past? The most powerful admissions writing is always deeply personal. Even a Statement of Purpose should reveal your distinct trajectory as related to the experiences of your life.

For example, rather than opening an essay like this:

My interests in mathematics and biology were evident throughout high school, and compelled me to major in bioengineering. It was during my undergraduate years that I learned what a valuable role biochemists play in a human life.

You could begin with your own personal experience, such as:

Four years ago, my mother was diagnosed with a chronic heart condition caused by a dysfunctional synovial node. Her doctor suggested that she receive a pacemaker implant, a life-enhancing device made by engineers that applies electrical pulses to the heart.

This compelling entree into your academic career makes the rest of the essay thrill with importance. When you begin to discuss the science and research most important to you, we have a tangible connection to your work that gives it depth and value.

As you do go into the details of your research, it is important to relate to it in terms relevant to those both within and beyond your particular field of research. Also make sure to connect the many scientific details from your previous research to your future work. Otherwise all the science gets lost along the way.

Show the admissions committee the human inside the lab coat, and you’ll have a statement of purpose or personal history essay that makes a real and lasting impression.

Wharton MBA Applications Processing

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From the Wharton MBA blog–application processing has begun! Please find details below.

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February 9, 2011

In Wharton’s MBA for Executives Offices, it’s application processing time! Right now, we’re diligently processing each application to make sure that we’ve received all of the required documents.  If you’re wondering whether we’ve gotten to your documents yet, you can logon to your application to confirm when everything is complete.  If we find anything is missing, we’ll contact you immediately.

If you are still planning to take – or retake – the GMAT, note that we will accept GMAT scores until early March.  A copy of your GMAT scores may be scanned and emailed or faxed to the East or West Coast office, but you also must have an official copy sent directly to Wharton.  The GMAT codes for the Wharton MBA Program for Executives are G56-97-36 for Philadelphia and G56-97-14 for San Francisco.

Don’t hesitate to contact us to discuss any issues surrounding the timing of the GMAT and other pieces of the application.

San Francisco program admissions decisions will be made by March 25, 2011 and Philadelphia decisions no later than April 8, 2011.

Intellectual One-Upmanship in Interviews: “Did You Read…?”

Hi everyone,

If you caught Saturday Night Live last weekend, you probably saw the preview for Portlandia, the 6-part IFC Original short-based comedy series PORTLANDIA, created, written by and starring Fred Armisen and Carrie Brownstein. The hilarious bit centers around the yuppie-meets-hipster tendency of intellectual and cultural one-upmanship:

For those of you interviewing at some of the top grad school, MBA and medical programs around the country at this moment, this video is a great reminder. As an interviewee, you’re looking to impress your reader with your connectedness to the real world. However, at a certain point, remember that conversations should be organic, not contrived intellectual check-lists.

Your job is NOT to outdo your interviewer’s depth of understanding toward a given industry. So, take the conversation slowly, and be cognizant of building a conversation vs a comprehensive intellectual check-list. Stay informed toward the industries most relevant to you; however, remember your ability to sustain organic, flexible conversation and engage your interviewer is more important.

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Ivy Eyes Editing

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The SAT: Coming to China?

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BusinessWeek recently posted an article about the SAT coming to China. While many Chinese applicants find ways to take the SAT in order to attend U.S. universities, the process is not easy or straightforward:

“As a high school student in Beijing, Xi Zhao cleared a hurdle applying to U.S. colleges that Americans don’t face. The SAT college-entrance exam isn’t offered in mainland China, so Zhao flew to Hong Kong and South Korea to take it twice.”

The article goes on to report:

“The number of Chinese undergraduates in the U.S. has quadrupled in four years. Now, the nonprofit College Board, which owns the SAT, PSAT, and Advanced Placement programs, is seeking the education ministry’s permission to start offering the SAT on the mainland.

As a former British colony, Hong Kong has long let students take the exam. China permits other U.S. tests such as Advanced Placement exams, which let high-schoolers earn college credits…In the last academic year, 39,921 Chinese undergrads studied at U.S. colleges, passing South Korea as the No. 1 source of international undergraduates, according to the Institute of International Education, a nonprofit group in New York.”

So, what does The College Board stand to gain from introducing the SAT in China?

“Increasing affluence and China’s one-child policy mean middle-class Chinese can afford tuitions that far exceed the price of school at home…Next year, Chinese schools will offer the PSAT, which identifies academic strengths and weaknesses in younger students….The bottom line: The College Board wants permission to offer the SAT in China, opening up a huge market for the $600 million business.”

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Statements of Purpose for Graduate Science Programs

Hi everyone,

Below are some key excerpts from a great article published in The Chronicle of Higher Education last week.  The author herself is a science professor and admissions committee member, so possesses some excellent first-hand insight. Don’t take it from us that your love for science shouldn’t be “prezygotic” in your statement of purpose; take it from her!

Be well and happy writing!

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Ivy Eyes Editing

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“At the risk of sounding like a cranky old science professor, I will state emphatically that when I read an application to our graduate program, I do not want to hear about your second-grade teacher (with all due respect to excellent second-grade teachers). Neither do I want to read about a star-gazing experience at age 8 (even on a cold, windswept hill), a childhood chemistry set (no matter how beloved), a fantastic documentary that someone happened to find when a televised golf match was canceled (serendipity!), or anything that is supposed to convince the graduate faculty that you have really, truly, profoundly loved science for a long time.”

“I don’t believe that the depth of your love for science, or any pursuit, correlates with how early you discovered that love, so I find such descriptions of childhood inspiration unconvincing in an application for graduate study in the sciences.”

“A few years ago on my FemaleScienceProfessor blog, I organized a “Statement of Purpose (SOP) Contest” in which readers competed to write the worst such statements…Many of the entries, including my own, were somewhat unkind in their parodies, but they all contained one or more classic elements of the genre, such as:

  • A quotation that is supposed to be deep or cute.
  • An expression of the applicant’s great respect for the university and its faculty (adjectives like “prestigious” and “world class” are particular favorites).
  • Mention of childhood (that inspiring second-grade teacher; the chemist uncle; a memorable science fair).
  • Name-dropping a famous scientist. Einstein is too obvious, but some applicants think Feynman is not a cliché and Marie Curie is useful to make a point about diversity.”

“…I have read countless statements from applicants who spend paragraphs trying to convey their love of science and their unique personalities rather than describing their qualifications for graduate study…An applicant who writes a creative but uninformative statement is at a disadvantage relative to a student with a professional statement that clearly explains the applicant’s academic record (including research experiences), motivation for graduate study (in a particular field or program), and career goals.”

The Lean, Mean, Admissions-Essay-Writing Machine

Ever wonder what makes an admissions essay stand out among the thousands against which it will be compared? At Ivy Eyes, we like to say that good admissions writing should read like a smooth, elevated conversation rather than an awkward presentation of you-and-all-the-amazing-things-you-do. Let us introduce you to the Art of Concision.

A concise essay is an Admissions Officer’s dream—they do care about your volunteer work with orphans in Ethiopia, they just don’t have the time to read three pages about it before you reveal its actual impact on your life. Especially when faced with a tight word limitation, it can be difficult to get to the goods quickly and eloquently. Instead of packing single sentences with as much information as you possibly can, imagine writing the way you would talk: compelling, direct, and filled with powerful anecdotes. Let’s look at an example.

In this essay, the applicant is attempting to describe his/her passion for improving health care policy. Yet the overarching theme of his/her desire for transformative policymaking is bogged down by clumsy organization and unnecessary verbiage.

“Every day, I treat a myriad of clients at the New York Veterans’ Association who are debilitated by health concerns that remain unaddressed because these individuals have inadequate health care coverage. Frequently, I work with clients with severe depression, who report that hearing voices limits their ability to work jobs during the day and sleep at night because of the intensity of their fears. In many cases, my clients stop participating in daily life and pursue no hobbies because these voices distract them from normal functioning in social interactions.”

Especially in succession, these overloaded sentences feel wordy and even a bit unwieldy. Side note: If you ever feel like a sentence or paragraph is gaining an unnecessarily large and awkward presence on the page—slash and burn! Start over with the art of concision in mind.

How to start over? Let’s pull out the key pieces of information we’re working with here:

• Treats clients at New York Veterans’ Association

• Unaddressed health concerns because of inadequate health care

• Clients with severe depression

• Hearing voices limits their ability to work during the day and sleep at night

• Limited social and vocational participation and interaction

Now that we know the vital elements we are working, let’s find a smooth way to thread these pieces together. I might write instead:

“Daily, I treat clients at the New York Veteran’s Association who are debilitated by health concerns that remain unaddressed because of inadequate health care. I frequently serve clients with severe depression, who reveal that hearing voices limits their ability to work during the day and sleep at night; furthermore, they stop participating in recreational activities because their symptoms inhibit normal social interaction.”

The art of concision is not just about finesse, but also about understanding the science of eliminating extraneous information and detail. Remember that the Admissions Committee just wants to know what’s really important to you, without all the distractions.

Best,

Lily

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